Wow great poem a lot of feeling in it bt cz u do all dat it isnt ur fault its d girls

Wow, i really enjoyed this poem, the feelings were portrayed so well in this, even though it was sad, i loved they way you expressed they fact that you kept letting her down no matter how hard you tried.
Great peice.

Excellent Work
5/5

Wow. hopefully this isn't something you have to deal with IRL. if it isn't, i can't tell. you did a wonderful job of explaining how each try and fail only made it seem harder and yet the persistance of the man was unwilling to give up. but it is indeed a hard lesson to learn, that hard work doesn't always pay off in the end.

very emotional. nice job!
~Ben

This is another wonderful poem. If it isnt based on real life, it is impossible to tell. the emotion you put into each word was outstanding. The emotion you put into the poem not only makes it a love poem but also a sad one. Great Job, 5/5

Kalee

This poem is really sad yet youv'e written it beautifully =]
Your emotions are heart felt and honest, these poems can be very difficult write but youv'e written a very expressive piece here and should be proud ^^ 5/5
The flow is also very good!

That was nice. It had an unexpected ending and I liked it. It seemed like the beginning was small let downs and sort of ungratefulness on her then it switched

nice.

Nobody is perfect and if you tried to do your best its all you can do. I liked this poem. It was sad and emotional. Good job.

This poem just captivated me from the start.. as I wanted to see how it ended. It's a sad write, as you tried your best for this girl.. but in the end things turned out unexpectedly lol.

A very well written poem.
Regards,
Olwin.

Wow. This poem is so sad and emotional but you really got me... I mean I really feel touched by this poem.... It's just so real and so sad... In the beginning I thought, okay so you let her down a few times over silly things like valentine and birthday gifts but towards the end it just got so serious and I almost want to cry. I hope this is now based on a real experience, but if it is, I hope that after writing about it you feel better. Continue writing if it helps... because you do have talent. Great job with this poem. (I am so sorry for your loss if this is true)

That was amazing! I freakin loved it.

Wow, this was a different style of writing somehow but it was a good change. I loved it, it was sad yet meaningful. It kinda tugged at the heart, you know? Good job cale. Isn't it crazy if you look back at your first poem and then look at now, just how much you have improved. I love them! 5/5 all the way
-laura

This made me cry, it was beautifully written, you really do have a gift. I don't think the man should feel that he's let her down in any of these situations but I understand it, beautifully written. 5/5 again