For ur first time writing likek this i think i t sounds pretty good. u kept the flow on track and the message is put out there. These are the emotions in order i felt as a reader happy, then alone, then hurt. I dnt know if its supposed to be tht way but thts what i get from it. The title is also intersting. Keep up the good work

I really like how the poem came together in the end.. every line just places pictures in ones head.. showing every emotion.. well done.. write more..

I actually really liked it. Its different.. and very well written, I am considering nominating it.. theres so much emotion in your words and honestly I enjoyed this piece very much - you did amazing that its leaving me speechless

5/5. Temps!
Great work.

Gerat job nik i think worked well and it was good i liked it and thats all that counts j/k good job.

Thanks for the comment on my poem it means alot.
now as for your poem...by reading it I couldnt tell it was your first time writing one like it. I love the last stanza!!

It doesnt look like its the first time...you've written it very well...the flow was epic...and it was different as well ......good job buddy ^^,

I really liked it :) its as if i could picture everything in my mind.

Your first time? Really?
Well I think your poem was amazing.
I felt the emotion and pain.
Great work and keep it up!

5/5.

That was cute...although i know it was supposed to be sad...But the descriptive words you hade used were really suits your age..;)Reminding me of those times...neatly done girl...and keep it coming..;)

This piece was adorable, the descriptive words you used to describe the little things making it seem as if it's casual. This feeling your experiencing.

I loved how you decided to just display a normal day, sitting on the couch, and then you just looked at his photograph and your emotions overcame you. It was a simple transition between atmosphere and you wrote that out nicely.

"Curled up upon comfy purple
sheets, listening to the rain's
song. "

^I loved the metaphor here, it was definitely beautiful in a bittersweet way.

"Curled up upon lonely purple
sheets."

^I loved how you repeated your very first line in your last verse and just changed one word, which in itself changed the meaning of the whole phrase. The exact wording shows that everything around you hasn't changed, but the way you see them and look at them.

Another wonderful poem. It's a really nice style too (;

I love this! its brilliant the way it is written

6/5 if possible

x

Oh yes, I read this one for the poem of the week in in the club.

I liked it. It was very visual. Maybe a few more intersesting words could be used, but you did a good job for a first time on this type. 5/5

Wow, i really enjoyed reading this poem. It went from painting a peaceful and pretty image in my mind, to one filled with hurt and pain. The flow was smooth, and the use of sentences of various lengths was very effective too. Although there was no rhyme scheme, its still a beautiful poem; and i think that makes it a little bit more special... =]

Curled up upon comfy purple
sheets, listening to the rain's
song.

^^ These lines are so cute, they drew me in immediately, and the metaphor about the rains song is beautiful.

Curled up upon lonely purple
sheets. Listening to my faint
heartbeat, tearing quickly
inside my body. Not yet ready
to forget.

^^ I liked how you repeated this line, just changing one word, from 'comfy' to 'lonely'.. its no longer so cute anymore, i can almost feel your pain.. Al in all, a beautiful write, I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for your r/r/c.
Don't stop writing...MEZi x

At first glance I smiled.
I always think the look of a poem is just as important as everything else that goes in to it, for without structure we'd all just be writing prose and paragraphs of it. So at first glance, Icouldn't help but notice the CPCPC, starting letters of each stanza. Seriously, its a technique I haven't seen before and its very sly. I loved it. (;

Theres actually not a thing I'd change here
I loved every bit. You should continue this style of writing it suits you. Great job. (: