6th stanza edit it to is
Great poem good meter and pace and writing helps to share a problem does it not. In the end the heart wins hands down unless your a cold heart person which being Irish I would find hard to believe ha! ha!
5/5 Ray S

I love this poem, absolutely love it. The best poems in the world are the ones that just fly right onto the paper and are about what you are truly feeling. I am in the exact same boat as you. Aside from the fact that I am the Male version of it.lol. I am recently separated from my wife(six months ago) and am just now really starting to Date. I met a girl who is alot like Gavin quality wise, really sweet, but I have this little problem too, lol.... Im still in love with my ex.
She too makes time stop when I kiss her. Read my poem "Hourglass". I still feel like I am tied to her, read my poem "love Snare"
But as time goes by more and more and I allow myself to experience life, Im finding that the tie I have with her will disappear and I will find true love in someone else. If you can make things work with the first love then Great... do that. But if your the one giving out more love then you are receiving than I would say get out, because if this guy doesn't love you as much as you love him, your in for alot of the same stuff that separated you in the first place. In that case go with Gavin. In time he could be the one that makes time stop for you with a simple kiss. good luck and I hope to find out what you end up doing.

Wow! You shocked me with this twist..I really love it, haven't seen anything as this before. Good Job 5/5