Petals

This is exactly how I am feeling right now! Great job! 5/5

Wow, you wrote it so beautifully.
I literally felt my stomach flip from the anticipation.
Lovely poem.

She plucks the petals one by one,
Lets them fall and hit the ground.
Tears fall freely down her cheek,
Sobs are choked-she makes no sound.

*Aww..this is so sad. I can picture a little girl somewhere picking the petals of a flower crying her little heart out. I really thing you did a good job at describing this. Lovely word chice too :) *

The chance she took was one by faith,
She'd said the words and meant them true.
Shared the secret of her heart,
and hoped he felt the same way too.

*I loved this stanza. One thing that bothered me a little was the first line. I would change "by" to "of". Sounds better that way. Other than that, I love how you tell this girl's story. So sad :( *

Saddened he frowned and looked away,
And she had seen his cheeks blush hot.
The last rose petal hits the ground,
She whispers softly: "he loves me not".

*Tear...that was heartbreaking...But I loved it. Keep it up hun. This was amazing. Nik*

Honestly, I was just going to write a poem like this yesterday.. Its amazing how quick someone write something similar haha. Anyways, amazingly written.. your words were overflowing with sadness.. the last line really hits the reader hard.

Good job.
5/5. Temps.