by tears i cry Jun 26, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
first love
I hate that since me and my boyfriend broke up you wont stop coming over |
by Hollymariee
The repetition is very creative . If i were you I would try to make the lines kinda the same lenghth , that way they flow a bit better and it isn't so hard to read .. But it's a free verse so it doesn't have to be that way , it's only a suggestion . Really well done , 5/5 . |