Stumbling Downfall

It's really a nice poem.when it comes to love...it's beautiful.

This was really sweet. I could feel the emotion in your words. The flow was just fantastic! and so was this stanza,

One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.

That was just soo breathe taking. Choice of words in it was great. 5/5 keep it up.

I have so many things that I want to say,
Everything I feel, is inside me to stay,
Words so delicate they could ruin it all,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
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I love the use of delicate in this stanza, without it I don;'t think it would fit, very sweet start to a wonderful piece.
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One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
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Losing is friendship is alot greater risk than losing a relationship. I like how you portrayed this with your words. Memories can never be forgotten, good or bad.
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I have more to lose, than I have to gain,
You're one in a million, that I want to retain,
Without me, who will catch you when you fall?

Yes, I know..

Loving you is my stumbling downfall.
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Such a sweet and emotional end to a wonderfully written piece, 5/5. Em

This is indeed a sad write, its better to have put your friendship first though.
Even though its a pretty short poem your stanzas flow into each other perfectly and you get the massage of the piece straight across.
Good Write, will check out more laterz

This poem is really good mate, it's a sad situation to be in though =[ it's happend to me.
Flow was really good and the rhyming was done nicely,, oh and strong emotions used to too.
Take care JXD