1st Stanza-
Everything I feel are inside, I think is instead of are.
Words so delicate it could ruin it all,perhaps they instead of the it after delicate.
2nd Stanza-
One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
This is just one of many, that I can't pursue,
Why would you pursue a slip of the tongue?
Perhaps?
One slip of my tongue and I've lost you. Just one of the many things I can't do,
I like the last stanza, though I would loose the But.
Unspoken Love, I think My Stumbling Downfall may fit better as a title, as it is obvious to me that the poem is about Unspoken Love as you get your message across very well.
Hope these suggestions are okay, let me know if you think I am wrong as I to am still learning. Ray S I won't score until you edit!

This is a really sweet poem =] Great job.
T

Sorry was going to carry on there but i messed up >.<
As I was saying -
The flow works really well and your rhyming is good, youv'e carried it through consistantly =]
Oh and the line who would catch you is beautiful, the emotion you put into your words is great, it adds more depth to the piece.

Nice to know I was a help. and it is good to see you edited it your own way and that you agree it makes more sense now, 5/5 Ray S

I reeeaally like this poem, like a lot! lol .
it is suuper amazinn ( :

"Loving you is my stumbling downfall."
Beautiful. 5/5

I have so many things that I want to say,
Everything I feel is inside me to stay,
Words so delicate they could ruin it all,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.

*This is sweet. I can relate to what your saying. I feel like this sometimes. Like you love someone so much, but it's better to keep that to yourself even though it hurts that you can't be honest with them. Nice work*

One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.

*This is beautiful. You use very simple diction, but each word is true and comes from the heart. I like that.*

I have more to lose, than I have to gain,
Your one in a million, that I want to retain,
Without me, who will catch you when you fall?

*Great one thing wrong was with the second line you used the wronf form of your it's "you're" for you are. Anyways I like how you ended this with a question, even though the answer is obvious*

Yes, I know..

Loving you is my stumbling downfall.

*Great work hun. I really liked this. Keep it up. Nik*

Great timing and flow.
Loved it!

First off, I would like to let you know this piece brought a tear to my eyes..i mean nearly..:)

I have so many things that I want to say,
Everything I feel is inside me to stay,
Words so delicate they could ruin it all,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^I think that, the second line was a bit off..
I think what you meant was "everything I feel is telling me to stay" or Probably it was "Everything I feel is inside me, to stay" I dont know which one but i think you needed a comma at least..And the third line was a bit off for the sentence..But honestly that line was too good i was just saying not really relevant to second stanza's focus..

One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^Aha the third line fit here perfectly....And i loved this stanza..Good choice of words, I can hear the tune of hurting in the first line..

I have more to lose, than I have to gain,
You're one in a million, that I want to retain,
Without me, who will catch you when you fall?
^^Perfect ending..I liked how you put a twist in the end.

Yes, I know..

Loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^And im loving this line even more...
Good Job.

Awww... this is such a great poem! I love it!! It's a poem that many can relate to because a lot of people fall in love with their friend or even best friend and have to risk their friendship by revealing their feelings. I love how you compared the person you love to "your stumbling downfall" because it can be like that I guess! Great job! I really enjoyed it :)

Very beautifully written, love the essence of the feeling it gives.

Nice Poem--Keep Up the GudWork..

Who say you aren't good at wrtting?? you are great!! in this poem you tell me how hard love is... i really like it. great job!!

Ou are an amazing writer... I hardly know what to add to the comments here, except to say that this poem is one that truely touches the heart. It's written so tenderly... and with a lot of feeling. So beautifully worded and expressed...
I LOVE it... it's just wen to the
top of my favourite list.

Beautifully crafted and written,
Well done!

Olwin :]

You are an amazing writer... I don't know what else to add to the comments for this poem, a beautiful poem... that truely touches the heart. It is written with a lot of tenderness and feeling... and is so beautifully crafted and put together.
Extremely well done.

Olwin.

This poem is really good mate, it's a sad situation to be in though =[ it's happend to me.
Flow was really good and the rhyming was done nicely,, oh and strong emotions used to too.
Take care JXD

This is indeed a sad write, its better to have put your friendship first though.
Even though its a pretty short poem your stanzas flow into each other perfectly and you get the massage of the piece straight across.
Good Write, will check out more laterz

I have so many things that I want to say,
Everything I feel, is inside me to stay,
Words so delicate they could ruin it all,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^^^
I love the use of delicate in this stanza, without it I don;'t think it would fit, very sweet start to a wonderful piece.
^^^^
One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^^^
Losing is friendship is alot greater risk than losing a relationship. I like how you portrayed this with your words. Memories can never be forgotten, good or bad.
^^^^
I have more to lose, than I have to gain,
You're one in a million, that I want to retain,
Without me, who will catch you when you fall?

Yes, I know..

Loving you is my stumbling downfall.
^^^^
Such a sweet and emotional end to a wonderfully written piece, 5/5. Em

This was really sweet. I could feel the emotion in your words. The flow was just fantastic! and so was this stanza,

One slip of the tongue, and I've lost you,
Our friendship at stake, I can't pursue,
So many memories of you, I like to recall,
But loving you is my stumbling downfall.

That was just soo breathe taking. Choice of words in it was great. 5/5 keep it up.

It's really a nice poem.when it comes to love...it's beautiful.