Comments : It's Hard To Believe

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    It's hard to believe in summer
    When snow is falling to the ground.
    It's hard to believe in myself
    When my tears are dripping down.
    For I don't know which way to go,
    What is wrong and what is right,
    Temptation is lurking all around
    And I doubt myself; my urge to fight.

    *Wow...This was such a detailed start. It makes me want to know what made you feel this way. I love the style and the flow is flawless. The imagery is amazing and the words you use are so simple. but powerful at the same time.*

    It's hard to believe in sunshine
    When the rain won't seem to end.
    It's hard to believe in something real
    When it's so easy to pretend.
    For when life is hard and looming,
    And I am asked how I feel,
    I can skirt around my heart
    And hide what's truly real.

    *I love the way you write. Your emotions are so clear and easy to understand. This is so well written. Everything makes so much sense. I love it :)*

    It's hard to believe in stillness
    When the wind never dies.
    It's hard to believe in truth
    When all I hear are lies.
    For each repreat of the "I'm sorry."
    I always try to forgive and forget,
    But to put it out of mind is hard
    When the truth has not come yet.

    *I love love love that you start each stanza with "It's hard to believe" That is such an effective technique. It's so clever and you use it well. I love that each stanza is as strong as the one before it too*

    It's hard to believe in morning
    When the shadows fall at night.
    It's hard to believe in happiness
    When sadness is my plight.
    For lots of bad things happen,
    Each and every single day.
    These things happen to everyone;
    I cry, for it's this way.

    *Aww...such a sad ending. I love this poem so much. You had so many deep emtoions here. Wow...I'm speechless. Keep it up. I can't wait to read more from you. Nik*

  • 15 years ago

    by sexy can ii

    All I can say is..WOW...Amazing job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Fade_t0_bLaCk

    This is a great poem. Its the dark side of reality and every bit is true. Keep up the good work.