Winds blew, thunder crashed,
Lightning streaked across the sky.
The cocoon began to tear;
Rain pummeled the earth below.
Caterpillar tears mixed with the rain
As the cocoon kept r i p p i n g.

*This was my favorite stanza. I really liked the idea of this poem. I thought it was clever and very original. I like how you showed the emotional apin the caterpillar went through in such a simple way. I think this was very well done. Keep writing dear. -Nik*