This poem has a good message but the flow is really rocky in some areas. Read it out loud and i think tht might help. Other than tht great job :)

Just so you guys know, this poem wasn't supposed to flow. It's a messed up poem about someone's messed up life. They don't flow very well, so I didn't want my poem to either.

I really like it... it get ur point of not having a smooth flow...umm dont know y people kept repeating the same thing about the flow