Olwin,
I have come to absolutely adore your writes. You always seem to write what seems so very close to the tongue and wants to be said, and then to top it off it has a great rhyme pattern to it. It flows really well. Wonderful Job dear. Keep it up.
Take Care,
Kay

Very free flowing and absolutely romantic. Depiction of the thoughts seems so natural and true. A very good write!

Well done. Ditto to all the other comments. I think we may have all experienced these feelings about that one true love we have. Keep up the good work.

Aw! This poem is beautiful! I love it! You've expressed such lovely feeling and I think a lot of people can relate to this experience... everyone wants to cuddle with the one they love and watch the moonlight and stars! It's the best thing ever. You write about this experience so nicely. Great job! :)

This is reeally gewd :D

Thank you for your comment! This poem is amazingly amazing ^_^.

Love it =)

My type of poem written with simplicity no flowery words with good an excellent flow and simple meter, straight from the heart. An easy read and understandable, whoever it was written for will love this as you get your message across and it pulls heart-strings. 5/5 Ray S

Love this poem hits you pretty deep

Olwin
what a beautiful poem of love you penned.

Sweet moments here I cherish,
With no thought of self or time...
Just knowing every heartbeat,
That you take so close to mine.

These words brought back so many memories for me. Beautiful dear just beautiful

It fills me.. it completes me,
The love you've given me...
I never shall forget it,
Because it's become a part of me.

This is how a prue true love should feel :)
Excellent job!
~Hugs~
Cindy

Aweh, I really love this poem. It's very sweet. :]

I really enjoyed reading this poem. So much emotion was wrote into it

This was a very romantic scene you described. very nice ^_^. also i love the night, just about everything about it.

I love every lines!!! wow! I was affected because it was related to me (about my love life) Love this poem 5/5

Another Nice Write!!!

This write feels so very real and heartfelt, I can completely relate to your words and the emotion with which they were written. Very pleasant read indeed:)

This Is An Amazing Poem.
Dont Let ANYBODY tell You Diferently.
I Loved It And Such Raw Emotion!
Keep Writing, PLEASE?!?:)
Im Going To Keep Reading Your Poems=D
5/5
It Would Be Great If You Could Comment And Rate My Last Poem? THANKS!

Much Love, Jessi.

I really appreciated your comment on my poem soul mate. so I thought i would return the favor and come back and read more of yours.

First off... me and you have the exact same style of poetry writing. I really dig that about you. I really liked this poem. It would be perfect for a hallmark card.... seriously : )

a few small changes I might make.

instead of:
I'd rather be than be with you.

you may like:
I'd rather be with then with you.

also.. perhaps change Coz to "because",
but make the line above it a bit longer to
help the flow.
as in:
Comfortingly next to you...

could be:
As I lay comfortably next to you..

just a thought.

And lastly, the entire poem is Great.
but there are too many "Me"s at the end.
if you can repair that... it might help too.

if you get a chance, check out more of mine.
cool?

It fills me.. it completes me,
The love you've given me...
I never shall forget it,
Because it's become a part of me.

--Nice Ending..and I like this part too..Amazing piece:)

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

:=)

5/5-C

What a wonderful poem Dreamofolwin!!!
Simply beautiful words here! Loved it!
Keep writing your magic!!!!