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This is a bit better but I feel your holding back way to much emotion in your work. Make the reader feel whats in your heart and mind, make the words meaningful and real not just letters on a screen. The first line should be powerful and grab the reader and just get stronger as it progresses.

You have a wonderful way with words. So simple yet so inspiring. 5/5, Em

There is no doubt that the ryhme scheme was untouchable. Although, I think that the ending could've been a little better. I feel as if it just stopped too abruptly. Good write though.

I liked this a lot. "I went for a walk to try to clear my head. But I couldn't stop thinking of all the things that he said." so true. i can relate to this. it never works, does it? ughh. well i thought this poem was great! keep it up! :) read my "change" poem please?

Another sad one from you. I agree with Jimmy, this flowed really well and told a sad story. I can relate a little to what you're feeling. Nice work. Nik