Waterfall.

The lay out for this was pleasing to the eye. Words flowed with ease and were filled with emotion.
an A+ for originality

//Emotions overflow like rapid
waterfalls, as light
pounding
shakes
tears
free.//

^^ these lines make me picture as if emotions have hit you hard just like a rapid waterfall as fall down and hits the water below... loved the imgery...

I'm unsure of the answer.
Can someone
tell me whats
wrong? Is
everything
okay?

^^ I just so loved the ending... the questions leave a mark on the readers... beautifully penned...

Temps,

This looks so pretty upon the page:)
The content is one I can relate to, in both ways. I have met people who made me feel this way and also I have made other feel this.

I think what it all boils down to is that something inside is stirring: a pain, or emotions not worked through properly and this causes someone to act in a way not related to anything the other has done. It is very upsetting and nerve wrecking. Often, we lose people because of this behaviour, only the ones who really love us, stay.
I feel for you girl, I know you are going through a tough time. I hope all will work out for the best in the end.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

I thought this was a very powerful and deep poem Temps. Well done, the style was easy to read and the flow was smooth. I loved your word choice and the similes you used, very effective on the reader! Excellent work as always, 5/5 from me. Take care and happy Fourth of July!

~MaryAnne

Great poem.

"I'm unsure of the answer.
Can someone
tell me whats
wrong? Is
everything
okay?

~ the word "okay", maybe "alright?" :)
This poem of yours strikes me. It had a lot of emotions. Thanx- for the tips you gave.

Great work,5/5! Congratulations!