"Teachers teach, preachers preach
A star is just beyond our reach
In the land of never..never..
Burning brightly on forever"

Wow, excellent opening. I loved the flow and rhming, right on target. Also, the repetition of "never" had a good effect on the reader. Good job so far, you have the reader wanting more.

"Seems everyone wants a piece
Of the lights that seldom cease
Words are written, words are spoken
But stars are mostly made to be broken"

This is a unique piece, good descriptions and visuals here.

"Every star that shines at night
One day will be out of sight
As sure as the sun will rise
It will set before our eyes"

Well-expressed Michael, and your words are so true. I felt like "shines" was a bit cliche but that's just me.

"A broken star with a broken heart
Was once a master of its art.
It gave its best, it gave its all
Yet, every star was born to fall"

This stanza was breathtaking, the whole concept and idea of this poem is very eye-catching and entrancing.

5/5 from me, you did yet another beautiful job. Take care and God Bless You!

~MaryAnne

Teachers teach, preachers preach
A star is just beyond our reach
In the land of never..never..
Burning brightly on forever

*I like this. It's very beautiful and simple. Your words hold such meaning in them. Good start.*

Seems everyone wants a piece
Of the lights that seldom cease
Words are written, words are spoken
But stars are mostly made to be broken

*Hmmm I like this. You have unique ideas about stars. I never think about stars being broken, this stanza makes me want to see how stars are broken.*

Every star that shines at night
One day will be out of sight
As sure as the sun will rise
It will set before our eyes

*I like how the stort continues. I also like how constant the flow and rhyme is. Makes the poem easier to understand.*

A broken star with a broken heart
Was once a master of its art.
It gave its best, it gave its all
Yet, every star was born to fall

*Aww this part was sad. It maks me think about the star being a person with a broken heart and how no matter how great they all, one day they will die. Such a well thoughtout piece. Keep it up. Nik*

Interesting write. I must be honest I wasnt sure what to expect with such a title, but you made it original and you also had a really good flow as well. Good job on this.

A broken star with a broken heart
Was once a master of its art.
It gave its best, it gave its all
Yet, every star was born to fall

^^ this part is so sad... it made me feel bad for the stars... well penned... i felt as if the stars are also displaying emotions...

wonderful write...

I took this piece literally and figurlurtively. The stars that shine in the sky seldom do burn out. But there will be a day when they cease to sparkle. That will be the day when a world comes to a halt. All our memories will be all we have. The day of Christ's homecoming will be the day when all stars blink then die. We will hopefully see brighter suns and moons and stars in heaven though. An existence on earth is the preliminary towards the finals. We make decisions toward's our future. Every mistake will be counted. But forgiven. We enable ourselves to experience pain. But God can take away our pain. He has the ability and power to let us rise from our troubles. I also sensed a bit of a metaphor. We all die in the end. Someone who is famous and a star to everyone on earth fades into memory. We have advantages. Our society clamors up concoction's. We live so richly. But always there is better. In the eyes we live poorly. The days are filled with smoke filled skies and dirty grounds. In my opinion the star's never fade. For they live on in each of our memories. And a memory that attaches itself to one of us can stay forever. I loved this piece and it really has brightened up my day.
Because though those stars blink out we will be enveloped in a love so profound that the light of day will seem so insignificant compared to a greater world of serenity.
Beautifully depicted.

5/5

-Lilium

The last line stuck in my mind. I reread it a couple times. What came to mind is how a person, a star in their own right eventually burns out .
I thought this was a very enjoyable read.

Wow I can honestly say I really did like this poem, It was different and so captivating =]
The flow was carried through each stanza very well and your wording was beautiful, you are one of my favourite writters on here and i look forward to reading more of your work =]
5/5 The last line is something that has stuck in me head, a lovely write.