This is great, i wish i could give you a bit more critisism and such, but i dont see much wrong with this poem.
The only thing i would say is that it is a bit confusing.
it should be abstract, btu still make sense, and it just seems to give pieces of a whole story and leaves the reader hanging (in a bad way)
But its just an amazing poem, the words are chosen wonderfully and it flows really well.
5/5

This is pretty unique I don't think I've read to much poetry on this topic. Sounded like something from that twilight movie haha I like the lyrics for the song because they fit perfect with a sort of fictional/dream poem. They finished the poem quite nicely to I must admit I'm glad you ended it that way very strong. Great job 5/5 very unique