Wow! This is just... Phenomenal.

I love your style.

I believe that this could be ever more amazing if the flow was a little more consistant but all the rest of the poem was brilliant.
So saddd.

-Osi

I love how you write
You are an amazing writer and you
never seize to amaze me.
I love how you make everything fit
perfectly together make them flow and
Rhyme.You word things like never before.
it was sad though:D
5/5
Take Care,
-Kortney

Dark write wit great flow. With some editing could be perfect but it's a good write as it is.
Enjoyed this much

Very good imagery , and nice mix of freeverse and rhyme .