'You take a bunch
of smaller towers
and mesh them together
until they create something else entirely.'
`I dont think that entirely is needed- its unnecessary and only makes the line longer.. which will throw off your flow in a snap.

I have always adored your poetry because its out of the norm, its not what you normally see on here. You can truly hear your voice in all your pieces, because you write from your perspective.. that makes your pieces very strong to begin with. Not only that but you write it in a unique way, its kind of like a speech but then again its not. Keep it up, I liked how you used the lyrics you were given..it was a neat idea. Great job.

5/5.

Wow this is great. i love the metaphor of how a relationship is like a sand castle. and about learning to build relationship takes a lot of test and trial. you've just got to learn by making mistakes. :) good luck!
-wei

Definitely an excellent poem. loved the style loved the emotion and i loved the metaphor 5/5 keep it up.

p.s p.m me sometime if you have the time :)

This is a great poem
i love how you refer to a
building a relationship like building a sandcastle
i have never thought of it like that
but after your poem it
made me realize they really are similar

great job
an obvious 5/5 :D

Keenan

Wow.
loved the metephor of sand castels and relationships :]
it made perfect sense.

well done:]
5/5