Ok-
i love how youve written it from the first person perspective and written it as a confession or statement (u know what i mean). I also like how you have incorporated 3 of the sins (lust, pride and greed) but used them to attribute to "love". very cleverly done.
The rhythm was relatively good throughout although some lines didnt seem to fit due to different syllable count etc-and although i love the message of the last line however it just didnt seem to flow and read as well as the rest of it.
however great work and goodluck! youre still the only one whos submitted so far =P