I love this poem
there was a typo i think
first line of the second part
"piece sleft"
i think it is supposed to be pieces left...

and that whole second stanza area was great
it put a big smile on my face as i read it
all i would picture was kind of like a woman standing over a stove or something
im pretty sure thats the imagery you were trying for
it was different hah i think i will read more

Keenan

ps thx for the comment

"Being someone else was just a game.
Until it became my life and reality.
masked with caked on war-paint
There was a story hidden behind the lies, me.
You loved me for who I was not.
You loved me for what you wanted.
As I peel these smiles off one by one.
You finally see the seed that was meant to be planted.
You stared and then laughed.
You pointed and then smirked.
Left me there alone, let the truth be told.
when you did, I was re-birthed."

Holy Jesus, this first part is amazing. "You finally see the seed that was meant to be planted." that was my favorite part of this stanza. It was a nice metaphor.

"With the pieces left of me to stand on,
I created a life of the new and re-born.
A pinch of love, a dash of friends.
Half cup of mixed tranquility and scorn.
A teaspoon of rivalry
A shot of a gun, and a scoop of words.
Mix together well and then add
A heart filled two-thirds.
Put in a pan large enough for the world
Then heat up life 360 degrees.
bake for an enternity
And enjoy being what i'm meant to be. "

This is really good, I liked the ending, "And enjoy what I'm meant to be" It made me smile, I haven't seen anyone write like this, it was a nice change.

Great job, ^_^
5/5
Keep writing, you're amazing

Erna

This is the second poem of this poet I have ever read and I am really impressed by its excellence.
We should all learn lessons from a lost love and this is what we should do with that lesson no real bitterness just get on with what lies ahead be reborn to love again. Love it, full of all those emotions and the answers from a wise head to boot!
A beautifully flowing example of all that is an excellent poem. Ray S 5/5 I have added Pingu to my favourite poet and can't wait to read more of her poetry.

This is a good the emotion was rich in it the structure is good it could be broken up more though i liked the ingredent list and prepirations at the end i though that was very clever

well done 5/5

I love the depth and honesty in this poem and the flow with the subtle rhyme scheme show a confidence that I envy

I really enjoyed reading this

That is a really amazing poem, I love it a lot. It's extremely true for a lot of people and I most certainly can relate to the things you said. The last stanza was very cleverly written, as if a recipe being baked. I love the last line. Its very final and makes for a good last line. Awesome job!!

Very nice! once again great play on the words, I only found a couple of spots that I thought could be improved and that was just capatilization. my favorite lines were:

You loved me for who I was not.
You loved me for what you wanted.
As I peeled these smiles off one by one

This can be very true in the start of a relatioship. One could be looking through rose colored lenses and then as time wears on those lenses fall to the ground. I like how you put the lines together here because to me you say it in a diffrent way then most people are accustomed to hearing about.

5/5 : )