Comments : Definitely, Maybe

  • 15 years ago

    by mckenzie

    So heartbreaking. I could feel the emotions. It's well written and has an amazing flow. It's a powerful thing when someone realises he/she has had enough. This piece captures it perfectly.
    Interesting title, very contrasting.

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    No offence, but this was filled with unnecessary filler words and an abundance of I, me, and you's. I felt as though that was all I was reading. This so called 'poem' needs a lot of work, before I could consider this to be an excellent piece of poetry for at the moment it is just okay in my opinion. This is more like a prose, so for this piece to work I would suggest making it into one. Try removing the unnecessary filler words and I, me and you's. Just by eliminating those minor things, I think this write could benift from it.

    Overall just an alright write for me, this isn't one of your best writes based on what I've read from you in the past.

    Peace, Joe