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by Jad Jul 12, 2009 category : Sadness, depression / lost relationships
Watching the time go by, As another memory dies; Of a person you loved, But then unloved. You said you loved them, Whether if it was her or him. Everyone has done it. No matter where in life you sit. We are all the same, Though different in names. We falsely love someone, As life we numbly run. So here is a little view, Of something that's true. When you show someone false love; They will leave having had enough.
by Courageous Dreamer
Loved and shoved seemed to be forced, esp. shoved. I didnt like the repetition of taste in your last stanza, it threw me off. Didnt like the usage of shoved in the last stanza. It didnt make sense to me. I think you can work on this and make it better, its not the best write Ive seen from you. Sorry.