by Ingrid
Somehow so much more of you, as a person, is shining through in this verse, MaryAnne. I think Temps gave you some very solid advice when she told you to go free verse.. |
Now THIS is the way you should write, I personally perfer this over the repetitive forms! This was amazing.. my favorite line was about the lipstick stained sheets. Such vivid imagery in this piece.. woow beautifully written! Keep writing free verse.. I believe thats where you write best! I'm so glad you went for it and tried one :) It came out amazingly. You should be proud. |
by Obscura
Wow this is a really descibtive poem the imagery is so clear theres so much sencuallity in it and the emotion is so rich and powerful the rythem is smooth and flows really well and the structure is really well laid out within the poem |
by Lady Nik
Sunshine seeps through |
by Light A Way
I really love this poem..I really love the first line "Lipstick stained sheets"...WOW!!!!...This is my favorite one from you...keep writing always... |
Everything about this poem was fantastic, your use of words, the flow and the imagery. Excellent job. |
Great poem. 5/5. |
by Aish
Dude-seriously-you are 14 years old!!!!!!!!!! |