Comments : Natures Fragrant Embrace

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "The passion fruit is succulent to the wind's pallet.
    The rain smiles broadly at the lavender fragrance."

    This was a stunning opening, your vocabulary is so deep and powerful, it had me wanting more and more, nice work. I can tell this is going to be a masterpiece.

    "..... The sun and moon.. kiss at the rising dawn.
    While the branches on the tree's sway and dance in unison."

    This created so much imagery, and you have worded everything perfectly. Just the thought of the sun and moon kissing takes my breath away. Excellent work, this is going on my favorites for sure!

    "Blue skies wink with their white cloud's wide awake."

    Wow, I love the creativity shown in each line, I never would have thought that blue skies wink, but you have gone above and beyond and painted such a picture.

    "Misty river's groggily yawn and caress the pristine waterfall.
    The dirt snuggles close to the roses prickly thorns-
    Both so in love that neither notice the howl of a wolves rejoice."

    I love the whole concept of this piece, its so beautiful and entrancing. Keep up the great work!

    "It's a brilliant feeling to succumb to while in youth-
    But happiness with love is not so very common.
    Do not frown a petulant frown... join in on nature's embrace.
    For it come's when its least expected.. Maybe on an earthy fragrant day."

    This is such a powerful and true ending. I am just speechless, why has no one commented yet? 5/5 from me, you have much talent, never give up on writing..

    Have a good week and God Bless!

    ~MaryAnne