Far out. Thats so amazing. Honestly, the rhyme scheme was perfect, not forced at all, the flow worked well and your choice of wording was so descriptive and powerful, it all made up a wonderful write. Very intense and emotional piece. You ended it perfectly with your last stanza, really wraps it up well, although it is very sad. Great write. 5/5

An intense and emotional piece! loved it. it's very relateable.. a lot of teenagers feel this way, and suicide is common. [sadly] My favorite stanza is about the puzzle. Putting an object in there to explain thoughts and feelings is a good way to make people really think. =] the only thing you might want to do is spell check it...[ not to pick at your poem... it's just that i'd want somebody to tell me.] Magnificent job! 5/5 =]