At War.

My initial reaction as i read the last stanza: waow, now thats what real poetry's all about! =] Honestly speaking, i try hard to find a flaw or suggest an improvemnt in what i read, but that is very difficult with your poems!
your metaphors and imagery painted a very realistic scene, which complimented the title perfectly. the creativity is awesome, how you or your inner strength at at war with your very emotions, and the numbness that follows is the aftermath...just... speechless. I can relate as i'm sure many others can to all the feelings this poem has expressed.
you put common feelings/emotions/experiences with all its creativity, into writes which can truly inspire. I love your work.
Don't stop writing.

take care,
MEZi..x

I think we are all at war with ourselves at times in life and are never sure whether we have won or lost. It produces regrets. Well done.

A good write. A+ for originality and emotions.
Can't think tonight so I'll just say good job.

I forgot to mention, that in the ending, I really like how you asked yourself that question, why did you ever go to war? It brings a hint of unsureness and regret. And then in those last two lines you try to wipe that guilt away, but in that last word, your unsureness shows.

A wonderful write. Keep it up!

"I tend to wrestle
with my emotions--"

This was a perfect beginning opening, I love the wording you used, it caught my eye.

"seldomly they
tangle themselves
into a cluster;"

Very descriptive, I love "tangle" and "cluster", well done so far.

"that
I have to pry them
apart with the tool
of inner strength."

I liked how you change "so" to "that", it reads a lot better. I thought these lines were very unique, you really amazed me with this one Temps!

"They swarm around"

Love the action verb "swarm", creates much imagery.

"me, forming a vicious
army of confusion--"

Another unique line, "army of confusion" was so well written, I never would have thought of that.

"that a bullet of such
extreme power is
just enough force
to make them stumble
to their own death."

This is such a captivating piece, each line is deep and strikes the reader.

"The aftermath is
bittersweet--relief
so soothing; yet--
there's still that
ounce of regret--
I'm rather numb;
emotions are
splattered with
colorless blood..."

Well expressed feelings and the imagery portrayed was so strong here.

"Leaving me
wonder--why did
I ever go to war?
At least I was
victorious...right?"

I love how you ended with a question, it has the reader thinking and add a nice touch.

Overall, 5/5 from me. I am happy to read a new one from you, glad you got inspired!

Have a good week..

~MaryAnne