Not So Perfect {Collab With Temps}

Nice poem. I like this. It was kinda of short but it was to the point. I got the msg and perfection is the rough edge of a cliff-- dangerous

Ehh.. its okay.. i couldve done better.. lol.. just kidding shanik.. very well done.. 5/5

No one is perfect in what they do, but they are perfect the way they are. This is a saying I read somewhere..not sure if these were the exact words.

I think often we are unrealistic when we fall in love and are blind to reality. No one is as perfect as we believe them to be at first glance..but should they be? I kinda like imperfect and modest men, much better than the arrogant ones who think they are God's greatest gift to mankind;)

I could not tell who wrote what, seemless collab this was.

I did not really understand the last stanza, did you mean to say you, yourself are invisible?

Nice work, ladies.

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

You both are very talented and work well together
You didn't show a break in the stanzas, each one was a part of the other. That doesn't always happen in a collab. With minds being different it can stand out greatly but this was flawless

Nice collab. Really beautifully written poem. Well done to both of you =)

I absolutely love the ending.. just the wording of it =) beautiful

"Never fall into the arms
of abstract things...
they can't catch
the invisible."

5/5 =)