Not So Perfect. [Collab]

Hi, i enjoyed reading this, quite a neat message at the end; seems so simply written, but its not boring... like, it had no rhyme scheme (not one i saw), but the flow of words were very poeti nevertheless. i liked your use of punctuation like '--' and '...' and ';', they helped give the flow some break-up points where the reader just thinks over whats just been read... i'm not quite sure if i'm making sense, but that's how i felt... =D

Never fall into the arms
of abstract things...
they can't catch
the invisible.

^^ i love that! so beautifully put! but i had to think a little hard to actually get my head round the metaphor!!
Awesome work hun.
Well done, don't stop writing.

MEZi..x

Awww temp! so was so nice, a different piece than what I've ever read, better than the desires, and knowing the difference. Great Job 5/5

No one is perfect in what they do, but they are perfect the way they are. This is a saying I read somewhere..not sure if these were the exact words.

I think often we are unrealistic when we fall in love and are blind to reality. No one is as perfect as we believe them to be at first glance..but should they be? I kinda like imperfect and modest men, much better than the arrogant ones who think they are God's greatest gift to mankind;)

I could not tell who wrote what, seemless collab this was.

I did not really understand the last stanza, did you mean to say you, yourself are invisible?

Nice work, ladies.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

You both are very talented and work well together
You didn't show a break in the stanzas, each one was a part of the other. That doesn't always happen in a collab. With minds being different it can stand out greatly but this was flawless

Nice collab. Really beautifully written poem. Well done to both of you =)

I absolutely love the ending.. just the wording of it =) beautiful

"Never fall into the arms
of abstract things...
they can't catch
the invisible."

5/5 =)