A Seed Of Greed

Fulfilment
Of my dreams would please.
Now they're laid down at my feet.
I should be content, at ease.

*I really liked how you wrote this. The style is very original. I also like the way it rhymes. One think I would change is the last line. You don't really need that comma, mabye an ellipes(...) between it would be fine. Other than that great start.*

But life
Brings me at these stages,
With yet more hurdles.
The chapter holds more pages.

*Another good stanza, one thing that bothered me a little was how you capatilize each starting word. You don't really need to do that. It can be a little distracting to readers*

I may
Have all I need,
But not all I would like.
Fate planted a seed of greed.

*I really like how this story is going. I think you have a creative style and it makes your poem easy to read and comprehend.*

They are
Material desires,
They no longer bring joy.
I search for what my soul requires.

*I love this stanza. Flawless ^.^*

I realise
I've been robbed,
No longer greed now; it's just need.
For so long my soul has sobbed.

*Aww this stanza was sad but so full of emotion. Nice work here*

So much;
Yet as little as can be.
All I ask for is that little part,
That other half of me.

*Wow what a powerful ending. I think you did a really great job with this. Just fix thsoe things I pointed out and your poem will be flawless. Keep it up hun. Nik*

I like the original format and style. The poem delivers well a very healthy moral overall a very well written piece

I loved your title, it drew me in.. just the sound of it was neat; being a love poem I expect something along the lines of how greedy we are when it comes to love; and how we just want that perfect person to come into our lives.. almost like money and how carried away people get with their desires to have so much of something.

'Fulfilment
Of my dreams would please.
Now they're laid down at my feet.
I should be content, at ease.'
`I dont know about 'Of my dreams would please' - would please what? I feel like youre missing something here. I love how you said now they lay at your feet; that was unique.

'But life
Brings me at these stages,
With yet more hurdles.
The chapter holds more pages.'
`Yes life is full of struggles and hurdles that we have to get over. I like your structure by the way, its neat and not sloppy and works nice.

'I may
Have all I need,
But not all I would like.
Fate planted a seed of greed.'
`Love your words and they are so understandable. Theres things in life we need, but then theres things we want, but the necessities are more imporant; loved 'Fate planted a seed of greed' that blew me away!

'They are
Material desires,
They no longer bring joy.
I search for what my soul requires.'
`I dont like the repetition of they here. Maybe you should say..
They are
Material desires
That no longer bring joy...'

'I realise
I've been robbed,
No longer greed now; it's just need.
For so long my soul has sobbed.'
`Greed should be greedy - I believe. I loved what you said here though!

'So much;
Yet as little as can be.
All I ask for is that little part,
That other half of me.'
`Beautiful ending, wanting that person to be our other half, or complete us.. our live. Compliment our love.

Well done. Not a bad write.
5/5.