Comments : Unkown Reflection

  • 15 years ago

    by Good Enough

    I look into the mirror what do you think i see
    Someone with all my features but that person isn't me
    That wears a smile but a frown my face bears
    That person cries tears of joy but i shed unhappy tears

    **the last line should be changed the flow isnt very well but i really like this stanza

    An Unknown reflection is portrayed in that glass
    It may probably be me future but its nowhere in my past
    My past is full of anguish it is not for the faint heart
    Don't delve into something of which you don't want to be apart

    **love this stanza. makes u think tht maybe your future is going to be happy and tht u can leave the past the past.

    The me that i portray is not the me i really am
    To make everyone feel good around i just put on a sham
    But my insides are tearing apart and i have the urge to kill
    But i just put on a smile and let you think i bear no ill will

    **aww dont kill anyone.

    If only you really knew what was going on my mind
    You would urge to befriend me and avoid the crimson tide
    This crimson tide of which i speak is a rain of blood flowing from your veins
    But sadly i'm keeping that urge down trying to keep my restraint

    **You shouldnt use crimson tide twice here. breaks the flow

    Do you see the me i see, the me in my reflection
    Or do you see the the physical being full of imperfection
    Have your eyes been opened have you begun to see
    Were you ever really my friend did you ever know the real me

    **i really love the flow here.

    I'll close this chapter on my life and seal it with you screams
    Ive perfected my imperfections, remember things arent always what they seem...

    ** you should be your

    starting a new chapter in your life is always great as long as the chapter leaves out the past.