Loneliness not lonliness .. otherwise your title is okay, probably a bit too lengthy.
'Adrift in a sea,
of loneliness
and lost dreams.
Feeling jealous,
and scorning
those who love.'
`I think that your first stanza would read better in your perspective- something like this:
'Adrift in a sea
of loneliness
and lost dreams...
I feel jealous;
scorning
those who love.'
That might work if you were to change the entire poem as 1st person.
'[Hurt].. by the anger that bleed's in your soul.'
`The brackets around hurt are okay, but you dont need the two dots after it and bleeds doesnt need a apostrophe
'Grasp life's horn's with a pull and a tug'
`A pull and a tug are nearly the same thing. So I dont think they are both needed here.
'Salvage your heart,
because there are those
who just need a friend.'
`I love what you said here, but your poem was a bit awkward in that none of it really rhymed but a few select lines. So the flow was a bit odd for me
Interesting poem, a good job but needs some editing.