Very good style. I love the use of words and imagery! 5/5

Love poems are really not my favorites but your's left me wanting more. I particulary liked this stanza ;

"I weep on this soil
This still wet soil.
I weep again gladly
where my tears lay buried."

Awesome write thanks for sharing this will us.

I like the angst of this piece Tom, you can feel it building as you read and I especially like the ending. I wasn't too sure about the repeating line at first, but after a couple of times through it, it grew on me and started to fit.

A nice job.

I agree with you Beautiful Chaos - I'm not sure I like the repeating line either. The more I read it the less I like it. I may have to try and change it. It is not a comfortable read for me even though I wrote it... Thanks Tom