Loved the piece, loved how it flowed and made me think. Sorry, but I have to end this comment now, I will complete it when I get back. Beautiful piece. Just gorgeous.
~M.M.Mapel A.K.A Pingu

Okay, now I have time. I loooooved it, so well written.
"The world will keep on turning away from the light
As sure as everyday will regress slowly into the night
Somewhere high above the shadows heaven is in sight
Clearly past the clouds we shall learn of wrong and right "
This is my favorite stanza. The first line is true down here in the AK. Well, up in barrow at least... They go for three months with no day light. =]
Back to the poetry. I loved it..
The Third line gives me a flashback of when I took my first trip in a jet above the clouds, i thought i would see heaven, but it was just beauty. Your writing is so genuine and gorgeous. You have a really good taste for words.

Your rhyme and flow was perfection but mostly the creativity and imagination was brilliant. It's nice to read something out of the norm. Different in an enjoyable way.
Impressive write

I really liked the concepts in this poem, however I felt that the aaaa bbbb style that carried throughout the poem was rather heavy and detracted a lot from what you were trying to accomplish. Have you ever tried free or blank verse? I think it would work well with your concepts.