The title really drew me in, and im glad! its such a genius poem, definitely unique. brilliant poem x

I get this poems drift though it is not to my taste not even unique see to many poems with this theme. I love simplicity but it just does not feel right to me The senses are our power and combine them with death one liners unless they to are powerful it doesn't work for me. LYE is also known as Caustic soda, LIE perhaps. I think your effort to make meter spoils the idea, Time and Grime 4/5 Ray S

"Feel,
the ground in which you lye."
"Lye" is supposed to be "lie"

I like this, it's different. I've never seen anyone attempt to rhyme poems that are so short like this, but I think it was cute. (: Well done.