This was a good start but I would work on giving out more images and feelings for the reader to think upon. Describe in more detail exactly what you miss, your words did not captivate me.

Also, I would go over your poem again and place punctuation in certain places and correct some of the grammar. example: "i" should be "I".

But I do think this poem could improve, though like I said, it was a good start, it just needs a bit more.

God bless and Merry Christmas!

~MaryAnne