Comments : Hazel

  • 15 years ago

    by Clown

    I can tell in this poem that, even tho you have not looked into her eyes yet that you have already devolped the most loving relationship ever posible. the love between a parent and a child. I beleiv that you will a fantastic mother and you child couldnt have a better family.

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Life just brought something so special.
    Her name to be is Hazel.
    She will be the one to keep me strong,
    when I feel like giving up."

    These words really held meaning and touched the reader deeply. Children are such blessings.

    "Like a little angel from above,
    I was chosen to be called her mommy.
    Her life is beyond the most important.
    Still cant believe shes growing inside of me,
    and that when Im happy so is she."

    Fourth line: "cant" should be "can't".
    "shes" should be "she's".

    Fifth line: "Im" should be "I'm".

    "And when Ive cried, she has cried with me."

    "Ive" should be "I've", otherwise, these words are so sweet and heartfelt.

    "But its so hard to belive as a 1st time mommy,
    that I could bring to life someone that will need you and love you from the very start."

    First line: "its" should be "it's".
    "belive" should be "believe".

    "That her fragile and small body,
    will need you to survive.
    Im so happy that she will be my daughter,
    and I will love her like no other."

    third line: "Im" should be "I'm".

    I really loved this ending, what a beautiful dedication to your child, great rhyme too. Here there was a rhyme scheme but no where else in the poem. This was a very touching piece and may God bless you all, good luck.

    ~MaryAnne