Awwh I can relate to this poem from a past experience. I love the poem, and the format. Really well structured and thought out =]

"I but i must endure
this retched pain...
my bleeding heart...
the silent tears..."

I love this stanza particularly, it's almost as if your writing a list of everything that your body is going through because of this one emotion. But something you can't tell nobody. Love it!!

Keep up the great work 5/5

X x Shaun

Hmmmm, my ex girlfriend cheated on me with my best friend. I loved the form you wrote this poem in because it felt like someone was talking to me. nice work