Wow what a powerful write, I was really impressed with your words and concept. Loved how you started with a quote almost and built off of it. The only two things I can suggest are try to not use and too much and both times your was used in your poem it should have been you're. Other than that very well done dear :] I'm glad I read this!

Great poem
this is positively amazing
i love this poem
it is different from what i usually read
but still was able to totally keep my attention :D:D