You are very good at writting this type of poetry because all of your emotions are honest, it's a very sad poem and youv'e portrayed yourself very well.

The flow carried through well into all four stanzas and th rhyming was quite good.
=] good job, take care

~NH

Sorry but i have to comment again; i really enjoy reading your poems
all these deep feeling that are shining through are really appealing to me
very well done

I realy likes this poem. i cryed(more cuz i didnt blink) but i like the ryme and it has a very goo flow.

I sit and watch the days go by
Hours by hours, sigh after sigh
Knowing I might never break free
Help me now, or let me flee?

*I loved this stanza, it was my favorite. One thing though is you don't need the questionmark after flee, you're not stating a question. I really liked how you wrote this. It was simple but also complex in it's meaning. I also like the use of questions :) those are fun. Another good poem hun. Nik*

Why will nobody take me serious?
Can't you see I'm getting delirious?
Why can't you see beyond my smile?
I just want to feel like I'm worthwhile
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Nobody takes people with depression seriously usually until they get help but I like the way you say ".... I'm getting delirious?" because it shows how emotional you are and how stupid they must be not to be able to recognise this. A smile is a smile to most people. Think of the good and then you will feel worthwhile. Powerful beginning as always.

I sit and watch the days go by
Hours by hours, sigh after sigh
Knowing I might never break free
Help me now, or let me flee?
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When we feel depressed it feels like the days are so long and it's so unbearable that it hurts. You portray this by "hours and hours". I like how you say "sigh after sighs" because it goes to show how really depressed you're feeling and that everything you do ends in a sigh because it seems so hard for you. "Knowing I might never break free
Help me now, or let me flee?" < flawless!

You won't accept I'm living a lie
Life is nothing, I'd much rather die
The pain I suffer from everyday
I'd rather the reaper took me away
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People won't accpet you're living a lie because I believe they don't think that you are. "Life is nothing, I'd much rather die" < shows how truly hurt you are feeling as you'd rather die than get on with life. Very powerful words with lots of emoition.

Life is a game, it isn't real
It isn't for me, it doesn't appeal
You really think I chose to be like this?
I love you all, but life I just wouldn't miss
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Love is the main reason that stops people commiting suicide as it means more to them than ending your own life. Another well written by you, 5/5. Em