by Ingrid
MaryAnne, |
This was totally different from anything youve previously written. You truly stepped out of your comfort zone and did another free verse but then used the short lined stanzas as your format. I think that was the best way to go, your poem flowed flawlessly. A great poem expressing feelings in a original way. I am impressed with this piece, and you should be too! Well done. |
by regina
Absolutely loved the way you formatted the poem..U should read my poem Haunted By Self |
by Shinobi
This poem has a structure I've never seen before... Guess this is collab than :) |
by Shinobi
My bad, this is not a collab, but still a unique structure. Enjoyed reading this piece very much :) |
Fantastic format, deep powerful meaning. |
by Cindy
Great piece you have penned. Loved the imagery and word choices. |
by Kaila
I liked the vocabulary a lot here. It worked really well and you definitly know your words. The one thing that was a little off for me was the first two lines in each stanza. The emotion was there it just seemed a bit repetitive. |
by Aish
Wow-this is fantastic-very dark, deep and i love the stle-although you use it quite often. i dont thik i can fault this poem actually-i cant even provide CONSTRUCTIVE criticism..... |
by Spirit
I liked the parts of your verses that can be removed from your poem. These little add-in's allowed the reader a deeper insight to the one seeking death. To me this was I great poem in progress. I say this becaues it's still seems that it has a long eat to go before it's finished and then it will be amazing. |
by Fear2love
Wow wow wow ur good |