Golden heart

by dominican shorty   Jul 25, 2009


Can you imagine life with out you?
i used 2 say,till my jinx came true.
it was what you always wanted,you
even said it i miss you,i never told
you!!!but i do,..i do..i swear i do!
i cry every night/still trying to forget
you!i cant i said 2 my self 1 day/so
i stopped right there the same spot
you killed you're self.so i couldn't take
the pain no mo so as u stabbed you're
self till there's no more.i shot my self
till theres no more.it took 5 shots.i
pulled the trigger back and...i stopped
thinking it through.as i lay down next
to the gun still thinking it through. the
gun went boom!4 times. I'm outa
breath/cant talk/tying to catch a
breath.it was so painful so i just shot
myself one time as i lay there dieing!
that bullet pierced through my golden
heart. my last words were"what happened,
I'm coming for you!i loved you and i
missed you!so this is for you!i wanna spend
the rest of my life with you!i cryed/i killed
and the world turned black and red i got
lifted by a black devil wit wings to a world
and there he was!
therefore my life flashed and burned to
ashes.bye this is the end,we killed us for
different topics is all but we....we will go to
hell together,bye it over i don't have to take
this pain,sadness and damn misery no more!

>i wrote this poem after people and i don't know what to >do i hope you enjoy it^.^plz be honest on what you >thing about this poem.

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  • 15 years ago

    by KemistryKia

    [[loved it]]...[[5]]/5

  • 15 years ago

    by BitterXSweetness

    I think that this poem was fair. And please don't get upset about that rating, just think about how u can improve urself as a writer. What I did realize was that u have a lot of emotion and u can tell that right off hand. Me as the reader was able 2 tell that this really touched u and that's beautiful that I was able 2 c ur emotion which is hard when writing about something that some1 else hasn't gone through. I personally never went through some1 killing themselves but I still felt like I was able 2 identify. But (now the cons) I think that u need 2 make urself a little more clear. Even though I was able 2 understand what u meant I still felt like u were kinda vague. Also I think that u need 2 break it up in2 stanza's. I got lost a couple of times. lol But over all 2 me personally it was fair

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