Quite a common feeling among a lot of us. Losing something and being full of regets realizing that one thing will not come back. Maybe just put a little footnote about your form you're using. Well done other than that. A short poem but a common feeling I know many of us have felt or will feel sometime in our lives. It happens to all of us!

I really like this form. i might use it some day.

i can feel the emotion coming off ur wors and there really amazing. i know the feeling of loosing somone u love. i can really relate to this write. good job