An creative way to express sorrow and pain. The flow was good and so was the rhyming. You did an excellent job with this poem. The way you express the feelings of pain and sorrow was really good. So Good job. -Jad

Great job! This was dark and reels you in with its emotions and meaning. I think these were my favorite lines of the entire poem. very witty, i thought.

"Your shadow ceases to exist
When you live life in the dark"

Excellent work, 5/5