First I would like to say, congrats on winning in the contest! You are one of the most talented poets on this website and never give up writing, because you have beyond talent for it. I am sure years from now we will be seeing your work everyone. Keep it up!

"A mint green
forest of yawning
trees dissolve eerie
silence of a shaded
evening--"

First line: I love how you said "mint green" instead of "forest green" or "grass green". I really don't hear "mint" used very much and it gave off a refreshing sort of feeling.

Second line: Here starts your creativity, "yawning" was very vivid to me. I never really thought about that, tree yawning. Great use of your imagination.

Third line, fourth, fifth: Beautiful wording here that blows me away. Definetly your best nature poem so far, in my mind at least. "Shaded evening" was so graphic and those words just struck me. I'm speechless Temps!

"as their felted
limbs of emerald-"

Never heard of "felted" before used in a poem, and this line itself just set the scene for the reader. "emerald" is such a perfect word that portrays much beauty and you have used it well here. I just don't know what to say!

"drowsy by the sun's
uninviting glare;"

I like how you make this poem come so alive, this forest, these trees. The thought of the sun's glare being uninviting really caught my eye. I have never read anything like this, I am nominating this for sure! And it deserves to win a million time!

"blink
involuntarily with the
chilled breeze..."

"blink" was the perfect word to use and then the next few words were as enchanting as before.

"gently allowing their
exhausted arms"

I never gave thought to the fact that their arms would be exhausted, very good point.

"fall to the side,
bidding adieu--
sliding into a
much needed
slumber."

The ending, wow, stunning. I love how you end this piece, with them falling into a needed slumber.

Temps, I hope I am not scaring you, lol, but this poem is beyond brilliant! I am just in love with it after reading it over and over again. Your talent just shines through every word, every letter here. It just filled me with peace, this poem and joy for some reason. You brought nature alive to my eyes, and it felt so real to me. When I was reading this I felt and saw everything you described so well, and I just had this feeling, whenever I step out into nature....

100000/5 from me, what more can I say?

And I know you may not think this is your best, or even that great, but it made me think and just appreciate the forest even more, the poem you wrote really had an impact on me.

Wonderful wonderful work!

(do you kind of get that I love it?) lol.

~MaryAnne

I thought that your description and imagery in this was outstanding. This part is my favorite:

"gently allowing their
exhausted arms
fall to the side,
bidding adieu--
sliding into a
much needed
slumber."

Excellent write, 5/5

Temps
What a beautiful poem. The picture you have painted for the reader is wonderful.
Great job!
Take Care
Cindy

Temps!

Nature poem, my favorite:)

A mint green
forest of yawning
trees dissolve eerie
silence of a shaded
evening--

Good descriptions here, yawning trees..I loved that expression!

as their felted
limbs of emerald-
drowsy by the sun's
uninviting glare; blink
involuntarily with the
chilled breeze...

^^
Lovely adjectives.. emerald-drowsy mmmhhh yah!

gently allowing their
exhausted arms
fall to the side,
bidding adieu--
sliding into a
much needed
slumber.

^^
that last part was really weak! I was so dissapointed when I read "sliding into a much needed slumber"those words were so common, not poetical at all:/
why not:
sliding into
blissfull
slumber

"much needed"sounds so..idk educational, something a mother would say to her children, lol.

I loveeed this poem, though;)

*hugs*
5/5 Ingrid

Very very Impressive There is absolutely nothing wrong with this poem.
A weekly winner

Very good. I have an image of a tree, basking in the sunlight in the late afternoon, feeling so warm and cozy, slowing relaxing their limbs, dosing off. Well done.

I feel the poem alters too much, i mean it doesn't but i think it does, it blinks involuntarily with the chilled breeze, but then slides into a peaceful slumber. I liked it, it was just that last line that i was a bit hmm about, overall though i love the words and structure.

I feel the poem alters too much, i mean it doesn't but i think it does, it blinks involuntarily with the chilled breeze, but then slides into a peaceful slumber. I liked it, it was just that last line that i was a bit hmm about, overall though i love the words and structure.