Now when at sunset
I am reminded;
of spring evenings
when you arranged
a daisy chain 'round
my wrist.

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Mel I loved this part !

You always manage to draw me into your poems from the very beginning line and I find myself wondering what creative thought will come next.

You ALWAYS add such uniqueness to your poetry! And I love how you bring everything to life and make the reader feel your words.

Excellent read as always Mel, I expect nothing less because you are simply awesome ..... awesome !!!!!

Wonderful read Mel and always a pleasure to read your word hun

'When,
divination
brought me to you;
I was blinded.'
`A great opening, saying the love brought the two of you together and blinded you [perhaps by reality or by the beauty of love, you didn't see something coming I'm guessing..]

'The moons shine was
too much to bear
so unspoken stars
cursed purity.'
`Moon's should have an apostrophe I believe.

'You,
reminded me
of a sleepless night;'
`Really good here, I liked your metaphor comparing them to a sleepless night.

'and like an insomniac
I experienced lonely.'
`Great lines that refer back to your metaphor of them being a sleepless night. Such sadness in your words here...experiencing what it feels like to feel so alone.

'Now when at sunset
I am reminded;
of spring evenings
when you arranged
a daisy chain 'round
my wrist.'
`I think you take when out in the first line, just a suggestion. It flows better without it in my opinion. Plus you use when later on in this stanza so I think it'd be better w/o it.

A poem of love that dwindles to sadness by its end but nonetheless a really well written poem. You did well! :]