This one is so well written
the vivid imageries and metaphors make a beautiful blend... so profound and intense in meaning...

//where lingering scent of hell befriends
the paranoiac thoughts in their wildest---
yet, loneliest...HOURS...//

^^ just loved these lines... so beautifully penned...

You have a way with words. So much emotion and meaning in each line. I can't pick a favorite line or stanza, they all work together to make the poem come to life
Very enjoyable

Gloom and despondency such a graphically emotional piece. I wonder were poems like this come from and I give thanks that I have never been so down as to write anything as depressing but it has a beauty about it that of its dedication another 5/5 but I am going to take a rest from the despair of your poems for now. Ray S

Life...a monastery of sadness...

*Love the word "monastery" I'm gonna have to use that one day lol.*

Haunted by colorful sorrows
-of wintry afternoons, and costly tears
from regrettable flood of emotions

*I think you're missing and "a" after "from"*

yet mostly never shed...

*I'd change "shed" to "flow" since you were talking about a flood the line before. "flow" seems to fit better there to me. Love this first stanza though. I can relate to feeling so much but keeping it all in*

Where minds are slaves of magical
knives -and- numb wrists
"CUT-RIP-SLICE" to death

*I can really relate to this part. Being a cutter myself I know what it's like to not be able to stop and feel like you're a slave to a knofe. A sick feeling that is so hard to change. A bad habit that I've spent years trying to break. I like the way you empasized the cutting put. Very emotional stanza for me*

Life...a theater of depression...
A place for all that is blue

*I thought this part was weird. I was expecting you to say something about a stahe or acting since you said "theater". Not sure how the blue relates to the theater. But maybe that's just me lol*

smiles and disgust...Nothing seems
-to matter, but a kiss of sweet death...

*I love how you said "smile" and "disgust" you raely see those two words so close together. This wasn't my favorite from you but it is something different and I like that about it. Keep it up hun :) Nik*

Thank You for commenting on my poem :) I love the way this is written and your use of diction is amazing! Keep up the good work :)

Joclyn

Thank You for commenting on my poem :) I love the way this is written and your use of diction is amazing! Keep up the good work :)

Joclyn

I realise this poem was created ages ago, but it's got something so special; time should never detract the value of this piece. It is a work of intense literary art! I hope you are still proud of this one? You should be.

Although sad but so expressive

This was written from a sad place in a melancholy land. I have thought these thoughts too...but life is full of surprises...we never really know what is around the corner...hell has to have a counterpart or? It would never exsist. Let's hope fate is kind...and it makes a longer kiss of happy life than a quick short kiss of death.

This reminds me of something the girl from "beetlejuice" would say. good job

I am totally blown by dis piece.the imageries were wel writn.it is a gud piece

I am totally blown by dis piece.the imageries were wel writn.it is a gud piece

The imagery; wonderful.
The flow of words; breath taking.
The poem in all: ...

There are no words to describe this magical poem.

All I can say is that you never cease to amaze me, Myryn!(;

The imagery; wonderful.
The flow of words; breath taking.
The poem in all: ...

There are no words to describe this magical poem.

All I can say is that you never cease to amaze me, Myryn!(;

Life.. A theater of depression..
A place for all that is blue

^^
That would be my favorite lines of all.!!
I must say, this was quite astonishing, Myryn.

A well deserved 5 out of 5!
Please keep up the wonderful work!

Amazingly written must say.... though life is never that dark.... but the way you've pooled up these dark thoughts....must say this take on life is particularly appreciable :) keep up!!!

A nicely written poem...:)please do read my poems and comment..!

I love this poem.
Its so deep & emotional showing how much life affected them.

Life...
a kingdom of hatred
where minds are slaves of magical
blades and numb wrists
"CUT-RIP-SLICE" to death
while souls scream out in pain.
- this part i loved. So many people can relate to it

Amazing Job :)
5/5

Nice

Nice