Good job on this Lu....I was suprised it was about cataracts. When one sense is impaired, the others strengthen. I like how you used the sense of touch. Nice job!

'Many times -
I wondered how many memories lay beneath the lines and creases
that shaped her face into the most beautiful puzzle.'
`This is such a powerful opening; something about it was amazing. I see youre talking about an older lady here, who has passed away [hence the past tense] Very unique lines here. Using the creases and lines in her face as a metaphor for the memories.

'she so zestfully described
and sometimes wondered -
(if perhaps her imagination played tricks on her mind)'
`Zestfully described - I was blwon away from this; the word choice is impressive. I have a feeling you are talking about someone you know in this right; it seems so personal. 'Imagination played tricks on her mind' - Another original line; I don't know what to say.

'The old antique china cabinet'
`I have a china hutch in my house; I think 'china hutch' is a more proper phrasing isnt it? I could be wrong but reading that cabinet seemed a bit off to me.

'Her pearl colored eyes dull yet - held such happiness'
`This is so beautiful and almost sad at the same time. 'Dull' brings the sadness yet 'held such happiness' brings a smile to my face. Pearl colored eyes was amazing; very vivid description. Awesome imagery.

'For I know now, she knew
exactly what I looked like
all along.

For there was I and he and
a twinkle ...'
`The last stanza was a little awkwardly worded. He didnt sound right?

A very great write. Definatly very deserving to win for the club-to-club challenge ; congrats!
To be honest after you mentioned the china cabinet I got a little lost but this was a phenomonal write. :] Well done!!

Luanne,

This is truly a beautiful write. From the first lines: "I wondered how many memories lay beneath the lines and creases
that shaped her face into the most beautiful puzzle." I was mesmerized. Wonderful beginning.
Then: "Funny how before today I never noticed the crack in the mirror nor that twinkle in my eye."
And lastly: " For there was I and he and a twinkle ..."
Wonderful imagery. And I never knew until now about "pearl eye"
Anyway, like I said before, a truly beautiful write.

Jeannie

Luanne,
Simply Amazing! This poem was nothing short of absolutely beautiful. It reminded me alot of my own grandmother and you always seem to touch on a subject that is so dear to me. You have by far created a beauty with this poem. This is among my favorites of yours. I would have not known that it was about cataracts and thought you tied the subject and the poem so eloquently together. Masterful write dear.
Take Care,
Kay

I am out of votes but, this is definitely a worthy piece.

Congrats on the win! Well deserved :]

The thing about poetry is that it is an art, it is seen differently by many people. Your poem is very inspiring and wonderful, I can't see how you extracted such an oringinal and beautiful peice from a simple and vage photo like that, I definatlly wouldn't have thought of it this way, and that is a blessing. Well done!

Well worth the win, Luanne:)

I think you must love her lots:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Congratulations Luanne, on the well deserved win. This is a beautiful and touching poem

Awww.... this poem is so beautiful! I love it and I love how you shared with us the picture that inspired you to write this. That's very nice because we all get inspired by so many things but when it's a picture that you can share with others it's very interesting. I loved the poem and congratulations on the win! You deserve it :)