Your use of imagery is splendid.

"A tongue waiting for it's cloudburst.
Rain tumbles into his open mouth."

Here I believe "it's cloudburst" means it's coming out of the clouds. I think your word usage of such an event is unique and well thought. Now as a reader, if I personalize this, I can picture myself beside him in the rain eating the rain drops. Eating rain drops was always a favorite thing to do during my childhood. I like it thought you teased my memory.

You've written a beautiful poem and I'm glad you shared.

-Jessica

So short...but said so much...i like your wording.

great job :]

I enjoy this interesting 3rd person take on basically the life of a rain drop from a cloud...Makes me think of a cloud as a not so happy thing as most people in-vision them to be, but a dark cold dungeon in which the water is trying to escape from.

I was short, but filled with imagery... i loved it! Keep it up!

I loved it had great metaphors.

Wow, this was a powerful write. I really liked this piece of poetry you wrote. The only thing that I didn't really like was the first line, but that's because it was a bit of a tounge twister. Other than that, fantastic job, keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe