A Soul of Nine Lives.

Excellent poem of i love it!

I really have no suggestions for this piece Temps, I thought it was a very different write, and the idea caught my eye. You expressed yourself very well and I love the inspiring moments in it. Your vocabulary was great here too, as some words I thought were very uncommon. A pleasure to read a new one, keep growing as a poetess and person.

Take care and God bless you, Child of God!

~MaryAnne

That was melancholic but nice to read. I enjoyed the descriptiveness of it.

I like it :)
I haven't been reading your poetry for a long time..this one came really good temps :)
Just a tiny thing to criticize:
"It's grasp is of concrete "
^
should be "its" not "it's".

Well done temps :) I loved your ending.
Write on~

I liked the attitude in this piece Temps, and it's somewhat...different for you.

'One's soul can only
take so much--
but mine...has nine lives;
it will persevere,
rather than surrender. '

I don't like the 'nine lives' reference, it can be considered cliche, and you could deliver your optimism better here; whereas the last lines communicate in the way the rest of your poem should. No need for the elipsis here too.

'It's grasp is of concrete
strength'

This doesn't make sense because of it's ambiguity, what is the soul 'grasping'?

'optimism traces
the edges of this fighting
heart'

If the 'heart' is relevant, why is it brought up at the beginning of the poem, when the narrator is describing the soul? The transition is awkward and doesn't follow, it'd be better off in it's own stanza.

'negativity is invisible
in the form of ashes.'

How can invisible be in a form?

'
Despite the burden
of intricate roadblocks
tossed unexpectedly
in front of lively aspirations, '

This is really well put; well done. The only problem I have is the two lines that follow:

'nothing will damage these
tangible feelings I withhold.'

Tangible doesn't really...say what you want it to, because of it's connotations, it's a case of changing that adjective because it feels like an anomalie in that stanza.

'I refuse to abandon their
pureness'

Don't like it at all. Very clumsy. It's clear what you're talking about but it's off-putting.

'Allowing them to drift away,
means letting you go
as well;'

Allowing something to drift away IS letting them go, so it seems pointless to repeat it

' that's the last
scenario I want to come true.'

Is kind of a different tone; don't mention it 'coming true', since the narration has been optimistic all the way through, end it with something to sum up the 'optimistic' thoughts that you've shared throughout the poem; the ending undermines most of it, in my opinion.