'allowing we to'
`I think you either meant 'me' or 'us'

'as we lay to rest
for eternity
by each others side.'
`To be honest this was a part of the poem that really brought me down. Everything was so original until I read this, this was really cliche and I think you could do better. Maybe a really unique metaphor would be better here.

A interesting poem. I loved the colors you used and how you related them to something about love. This is probably my favorite format, the short lines that flow so beautifully. I loved your thoughts in this write, the only problem I had was that part I highlighted and commented on for being too cliche. Otherwise a well written poem. I enjoyed it. :]