Beautifully worded I am always in awe of how wonderfully these hard forms can turn out
Structured rhyme isn't easy.
This was really nice

Raj
You did wonderful on the club challenge. Creating this sad yet beautiful piece.

Caught in cobweb of dreams,
got frozen tears of thee,
blot images, afar they gleam,
knot tightens, could not foresee.

Great imagry in this stanza. I love the metaphors you used.

Lonely in the maze of time,
barely smile my heart forlorn,
slowly beckons a distant chime,
only song of a winter morn.

Getting caught in loneliness is always sad. the distant chime and the song of a winter morn. seem to intensify those feeling.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Good work with the form. It sings of sadness, a silent song that only you can hear when lonely.

This is so beautiful, you made each word count in this Lento..

This feeling on being alone in the maze of time, the distant chime and the line "only song of a winter morn" are so melancholic and descriptive...You did well on this, really well:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Sounds like a difficult form but you have
penned it well. There is a soft touch to this
sadness..very nice.

"Caught in cobweb of dreams,"

This was wonderful for the opening line, it grabbed my attention.

"got frozen tears of thee,"

I really don't like "got" at the beginning because it sounds so much like slang when at the end you have "thee".

"blot images, afar they gleam,
knot tightens, could not foresee."

Well-penned, this form looks really difficult but you could pull it off!

"Lonely in the maze of time,"

Okay, this is one of my favorite lines, so unique and expressive.

"barely smile my heart forlorn,"

I know you have to stick to the form, but I really don't like how there is no "I" or anything before "barely", it just reads a bit differently. That's just my view though.

"slowly beckons a distant chime,
only song of a winter morn."

The ending is brilliant, the imagery created and the feelings expressed struck the reader. I do think there were a few spots that maybe could be worked on, but then again that was my opinion, take care and God bless you.

~MaryAnne

Nice word choice and imagery.

I just had a problem understanding this line:

^got frozen tears of thee,^

The got doesn't make sense.

I like how your rhyming isn't forced and you did a nice jobon the form.

Great alliteration in the title.

'Caught in cobweb of dreams,'
^To me this was a very strong beginning, I know the feeling of getting caught up in your dreams; they do seem like a big cobweb that youre caught in and cant escape.

'got frozen tears of thee'
^Got seemed awkward here, I didnt really like it-- but although it seems awkward it does flow good.

'Lonely in the maze of time,'
^Lovely wording here -- 'maze of time'

Great work (: This had a touch of sadness but you did well with it. Keep writing!